Coherence is crucial to IELTS writing. Why? It is up to 25% of your score: it is as important to your final score as both grammar and vocabulary. So, as you prepare your writing, you do need to think about it. What I want to do in this post is to show one relatively simple way to achieve it. This may not be exciting, but it is practical in that it will help not just to improve your score, but also make the writing process easier. In truth, I am going to be boring about boring topic sentences, which are something you may have heard before, but at least I am going to do it using pretty colours!
Paragraph coherence
One form of coherence is coherence within a paragraph. To achieve this you need to learn how to structure a paragraph with a topic sentence and to develop that sentence through the appropriate use of explanations and examples. In this post I am going to suggest a possible model to help you do this by teaching you to PEE – something everyone should be able to do quite naturally. It may help, however, first to think about how this works in the reading and speaking papers.
Understanding paragraph coherence – topic sentences – think reading
In the IELTS reading exam, one very familiar task is to identify the main topic of a paragraph by selecting the correct heading from a list. One way to complete that task is to identify one sentence that gives the main point of the paragraph – this is the topic sentence. Your goal in the writing paper is to ensure that each of your paragraphs contains a similar topic sentence. Learn how to write by thinking about reading.
Paragraph coherence – expanding the topic – think speaking
You can also learn to write by thinking about speaking. In the speaking exam, one of the goals is not to give very brief answers, but to give extended answers. In the writing the same applies: it is important to expand on the topic to show you have sufficient vocabulary and grammar to say what you want. The mistake is to write very short paragraphs or paragraphs which contain unrelated points. If you don’t believe me, you should note that the question almost invariably contains these words:
“You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.”
This is telling you that coherence is important. If you do support what you say with evidence and examples, your writing will become coherent.
A model – Learn how to P-E-E
One way to expand your topic sentences is to
make the point (P)
explain it (E)
give an example (E)
How it works
This is not the only way to be coherent, but it is a good model to folllow in the context of an exam essay for two reasons. Firstly, it impresses the examiner. It also makes the writing easier as most paragraphs can follow the same pattern and planning becomes much easier as you already know the shape of each paragraph before you start writing.
Some examples
Read through these three paragraphs taken from different IELTS essays and note how they all have a similar structure:
This is a pattern you can follow in most essays to give coherence to your writing by expanding on one point. I will add that this just a model guideline, it isn’t a rule. There will be times when you do not use examples for instance.
There are those who argue that the internet has had an extremely positive influence on communication. They say this because in the past it was sometimes impossible to call people in other countries on the telephone, but now it is relatively simple to use a program such as Skype to talk to them for free or to send an email. A good example here are the students who go to study abroad and are able to send messages home with no difficulty, when in past they would have had to buy stamps and go to the post office which was much harder and more expensive.
A strong argument can of course be made from the opposite position. Part of this argument is that countries and nations need to preserve old buildings in order to preserve their heritage. In addition, however, to this cultural argument, there are positive economic benefits in preserving old buildings. An illustration here is Egypt once again, a country which depends on tourism for much of its national income simply because visitors pay to come from other countries to visit its ancient sites. There are several reasons why it can be argued that television has a negative effect on cultural development. Perhaps the principle argument is the lowbrow nature of many programmes, particularly sitcoms and soap operas. People who watch these programmes do not learn anything, they are simply entertained. The other major argument is that because people watch so much television, they no longer take part in more traditional forms of cultural entertainment. An example here is how traditional dancing and music is becoming much less popular because people are staying at home to watch the television.
A suggestion
If any of this is new to you, I have a suggestion. For now, don’t practise writing essays: go back to the paragraph. This may seem limiting, but again it is practical. Once you can write a good paragraph, the exam essay becomes easy, for it is really little more than 5 paragraphs and if you can write one paragraph, you can write 5.
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Hi, Everything dynamic and very positively!
Truden
I really appriciate your work. i have selected 5th june for test, and i am practising writing tasks, and your blog is helping me to learn new structures, vucabulary and how to deal a paragraph for ielts writing task 2, : )
I can’t believe I’ve been going for years without kionwng that.
The advice is very helpful. But could you tell me where I can get materials to help me to develop paragraphs.
Thanks a lot
Happy New Year!
I’m planning a series of online exercises soon. For the time being I suggest UEfAP http://www.uefap.com/writing/writfram.htm- a truly excellent site with lots of good resources and exercises for academic English.
Happy new year to you as well.
(I’m busy at the moment putting together some letter writing materials – if that’s of any interest. They should be appearing in the next few days.)
Hi Dominic!
I’ve just got my IELTS result: 7.5 overall band with 7.0 writing at the lowest partial band score. Thank you very much for such excellent work, especially the PEE model in writing, that greatly benefits IELTS candidates!
Thank you very much for your effort sir. i really appreciate your work on this site. These materials surely going to helpful. There is no doubt in that. Once again thank you very much. keep on your good work.
I really appreciate your work !!! it was really helpful. I’m doing my IELTS exam tomorrow!
Thank you very much for valuable guidance.
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Dear Dominic,
hope you are well.
I will be highly obliged if you could please tell me what is the question for the above sample essay.
Awaiting your kind early reply.
kindest regards
H.
It’s from one of my older sample essays. Sorry I no longer have the question.
You are my helper ! Thnak you. Best, Vesna
You are my helper ! Thank you. Best, Vesna