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IELTS curriculum essay

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Subjects such as Art, Sport and Music are being dropped from the school curriculum for subjects such as Information Technology. Many people children suffer as a result of these changes. To what extent would you support or reject the idea of moving these subjects from school curriculum?

In recent times there has been much debate about which subjects should be included on the school curriculum. One particular issue is whether the introduction of more modern subjects such as IT for more traditional subjects such as art and music disadvantages the pupils. I believe that this is a difficult question and different solutions need to be found for primary and secondary schools.

There is one major argument in favour of replacing art, music and sport on the curriculum with subjects like IT. This is that the purpose of school is to prepare children for their working life after school, so the subjects on the curriculum should be relevant to their potential careers. From this point of view, IT is much relevant to schoolchildren as they need to be computer literate if they want to survive in the workplace. For example, it is easy to see that word processing and programming skills will impress employers more than the ability to run fast or draw well.

There are also, however, strong arguments for retaining the more traditional subjects as part of the curriculum. One significant counter-argument is that the purpose of education is not just to prepare children for later careers, but also to develop their all round “culture”. It is important that children leave school with some knowledge of art, music and sport as all these are all help develop aspects of young people’s personalities.

My own personal point of view is that there is merit in both sides of the debate and that all children should study some IT, art music and sport at least at primary school. At secondary school, however, children should be offered a choice between these subjects so that they can continue to study them if they wish.

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15 Responses to IELTS curriculum essay

  1. xyz February 16, 2010 at 5:29 pm #

    nice and well balanced essay

  2. Name October 26, 2010 at 12:07 pm #

    thank you for the great work to give the excellent essays

  3. iqbal anwar May 31, 2011 at 11:07 am #

    I like your sample essay.I need help for generat IELTS.

  4. Deepak September 4, 2011 at 4:24 pm #

    Great … Its excellent combination of ideas and sentence..
    Thanks for sharing

    • mujtaba September 28, 2011 at 5:35 pm #

      nice essay you have

  5. Anonymous May 17, 2012 at 3:26 am #

    Awesome it did helped me a lot.Mohsin

  6. student September 16, 2012 at 12:56 am #

    Great.I just want to ask about the type of the question.At first glance it appears like a proposal essay and this one is an argument essay. So, is it possible to follow the argument-led approach for such a question?

  7. Nazeeh October 2, 2012 at 4:26 am #

    Consice,precise and up to the point.

  8. JACKY March 30, 2013 at 11:11 pm #

    One particular issue is whether the introduction of more modern subjects such as IT for more traditional subjects such as art and music disadvantages the pupils

    Dear teacher, i am not sure what does “for” mean “for more traditional subjects ”
    is it better to change into “than” in this sentense?

  9. Anonymous May 13, 2013 at 10:46 pm #

    Is there any problems for one paragraph having only one main point? very nice essay

  10. Rajeev May 3, 2014 at 5:49 am #

    Meanwhile, I wrote intro for the same essay as below. I understand that it’s not possible for you to review everyone’s essay posted here but still if anyone else has any comments – thanks –

    Keeping school curriculum updated and relevant by bringing required changes in it every year, is not an easy task. In particularly, when challenge is to keep balance between traditional subjects (like Art, Sport and music) and modern subjects (like Information Technologies). I, personally, welcome the changes in curriculum but do not fully agree with the idea of dropping old subjects completely for new subjects.

  11. Jhon S June 25, 2014 at 3:44 pm #

    dear Dominic, thanks for your great sample essays.

    it would be very helpful if you mention about the band individual essay would get.

    • Dominic Cole November 16, 2014 at 7:58 am #

      Even the simplest of these essays would get at least band score 8.0.

  12. Smeralda May 22, 2015 at 1:39 am #

    Hi,
    I am Smeralda and I am studying by myself for Academic Ielts.
    I have tried to reply to the essay proposed above. Could I please ask some feedback about it and the areas to improve? If you are able to mention approximately the band that I could get writing an essay like this, it could be great.

    Many thanks in advance.

    “Keeping school curriculum updated and relevant by bringing required changes is not an easy task. This is particularly true when the issue is balancing the school curriculum between traditional subjects (like Art, Sport and music) and modern subjects (such as Information Technologies).
    On the one hand, the replacement of arts, music and sport with new emergent disciplines is believed to be a positive change for all levels of education. The major argument in favour is that the introduction of Information technology could provide young students with important skills for their potential future career. In addition, these IT abilities, usually, are more appreciated then traditional knowledge by the employers. In other words, by studying more IT, the pupils become more able to face their future career and to fulfil the requirements of the working market. This opinion is essentially based on the idea that the main purpose of education is preparing children for their working life.
    On the other hand, it could reasonably be argued that the role of schools is much more extensive and include not only the professional future of young generations, but also their way of being, thinking and behaving, in every day life and in a variety of situations. In according to this view, there are strong arguments for retaining traditional subjects in the school curriculum, considering the fact that arts, history, music and sport contribute to the all round culture of the pupils. Furtermore, how demonstrated by copious pedagogical and psychological researches, studying traditional subjects is significant for the cognitive development and many aspects of young people’s personality.
    In my opinion, even though the relevance of the computer literacy in the modern society, we are not able to leave traditional subjects out of consideration, due to the important role of education, primarily consisting in shaping the minds of the tomorrow’s adults and nurturing their intellect.”

  13. mary March 22, 2017 at 2:41 pm #

    very good

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