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IELTS globalisation essay

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Differences between countries become less evident each year. Nowadays, all over the world people share the same fashions, advertising, brands, eating habits and TV channels. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages of this?

It is undoubtedly the case that the world today has become a global village. One of the effects of this is that increasingly people in all corners of the world are exposed to similar services and products and adopt similar habits. My view is that this is largely a beneficial process and in this essay I will explain why.

The first point to make is that there are some downsides to this process of cultural globalisation, but these are relatively minor. The most significant of these disadvantages is that it can weaken national culture and traditions. For example, if people watch films and television programmes produced in the United States, sometimes they adopt aspects of the lifestyle of the American characters they see on television. Typically, however, this only affects minor details such as clothing and does not seriously threaten national identity.

When we turn to the other side of the argument, there are two major points to make in favour of this process. The first of these is that the more we share habits, products and services, the better we understand each other and this reduces prejudice against other nations. The other point relates to modernity. It is a sign of progress in a society that people no longer are restricted to brands and advertisements from their own society but are able to access more international goods. If, for example, there were unable to drink Coca Cola or wear Nike, then that would mean their society was not part of the international community.

In conclusion, I understand the point of view of people who worry about cultural globalisation because it is a threat to national traditions. However, this is outweighed by its positive impact on international understanding and the fact that it represents progress within a society.

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The question

Differences between countries become less evident each year. Nowadays, all over the world people share the same fashions, advertising, brands, eating habits and TV channels. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages of this?

Focussing on the topic

This question clearly is about the process of globalisation and whether it is a good or a bad thing. However, you need to be careful not to just write a general globalisation essay. Globalisation is a big idea and can refer to many different things. Here the question  asks you to focus on the concepts such as  fashion, brands, eating habits and television. This means that you need to refer to these concepts in your essay and not, for example, simply write about financial or commercial globalisation.

Consider both sides of the issue

You should also note that you need to write about both sides of this issue. It would be a mistake to write only about the disadvantages or advantages because of the way the question is worded. You can only say if the advantages outweigh the disadvantages if you consider both.

Structuring the essay

The logical approach here is to write one paragraph about advantages and another about disadvantages. Personally, I prefer to write about the opinion I disagree with first. You may choose to do it the other way around.

Balance and making your essay coherent 

Thinking about balance is one excellent way to make your writing more coherent. The general idea is that the more balanced your essay is, the better it links together. This can work in different ways:

  1.  essay structure – linking the introduction and the conclusion
  2.  paragraphs – balancing any ideas with explanations and examples
  3. vocabulary – repeating or reflecting vocabulary

1. Balancing your essay structure

the introduction and the conclusion should match: you outline your position in the introduction and the conclusion repeats that position and adds the main ideas you have introduced in the main body paragraphs of the essay.

the main body paragraphs should match: you want to make sure that each paragraph is clearly about one main idea that relates to the question. Here, this should be quite easy. The main ideas are:

cultural globalisation is a good thing

cultural globalisation is a bad thing

These ideas obviously balance each other and relate to the main question. All you need to do is find reasons and examples to support those ideas.

The top tip here is to try and make the first sentence of each content paragraph reflect/balance the language of the the previous paragraph. This makes the argument of your essay much easier to follow and so more coherent. So, for example, if you start one paragraph with:

There are several reasons to argue that this form of cultural globalisation has had negative consequences for society.

The next should begin with a sentence that reflects/balances that sentence so that the reader/examiner can understand how the two paragraphs link together:

There are, however, also arguments that that the positive effects of this globalisation are more significant.

In this way, the structure of your argument and the coherence of your essay is immediately obvious. This is the intelligent way of writing “Firstly,” “Secondly”.

2. A balanced paragraph structure

The main idea here is that when you write your paragraphs, you do not just include “ideas”. If you have too many ideas, it is likely that your essay will become confusing to read. What you want to try and do is balance every idea with an explanation and/or an example. The benefit of this is that you can develop one idea coherently.

A top tip here is that you want to start off with a very general point and then become more detailed with each sentence. This allows the reader/examiner to follow your train of thought.

There are a number of ways in which this form of  globalisation has had negative effects on society. [Very general statement]. Perhaps the most significant of these  is how there is now far less diversity than before and that this has also lowered satndards. [more complex explanation]. A good example here is how one of the most popular meals in the world is McDonalds’ Happy Meal, a dish that cannot compare to any of the national dishes it has replaced, such as a curry in India or a hotpot in China. [balanced by a simple example]

3. Balancing your vocabulary

Another form of balance you want to consider is repeating or reflecting vocabulary in your essay. The idea here is that if you keep on changing your words, it can make you essay harder to follow. There are 3 separate ways in which you can do this:

  1. repeating words
  2. changing the form of the word
  3. using a synonym or similar phrase

There are a number of positive aspects to this form of cultural globalisation. One such aspect [repeated word] is how the “new” goods and services generally make out lives more convenient and have improved our quality of life. For example, fast food chains such as McDonalds provide us with convenience [change of word form] food that is much better adapted to the pace of modern life. Indeed, few people nowadays can find the time to sit down [a phrase with the same general meaning]and have a traditional meal in the middle of the day.

It is undoubtedly the case that the world today has become a global village. One of the effects of this is that increasingly people in all corners of the world are exposed to similar services and products and adopt similar habits. My view is that this is largely a beneficial process [personal opinion balanced by the opinion in the conclusion]and in this essay I will explain why.

The first point to make is that there are some downsides to this process of cultural globalisation, but these are relatively minor. The most significant of these disadvantages [balances/reflects downsides in the previous sentence]is that it can weaken national culture and traditions. For example, if people watch films and television programmes produced in the United States, sometimes they adopt aspects of the lifestyle of the American characters they see on television. Typically, however, this only affects minor details such as clothing and does not seriously threaten national identity. [an example and explanation that balance and develop  the main idea of the paragraph that globalisation weakens national culture]

When we turn to the other side of the argument, there are two major points to make [balances the language of the first paragraph – the structure is clear] in favour of this process. The first of these is that the more we share habits, products and services, the better we understand each other and this reduces prejudice against other nations. The other point relates to modernity. It is a sign of progress [balances/reflects modernity in the previous sentence] in a society that people no longer are restricted to brands and advertisements from their own society but are able to access more international goods. If, for example, there were unable to drink Coca Cola or wear Nike, [two famous brands, reflecting/balancing brands in the previous sentence] then that would mean their society [repeated language] was not part of the international community.

In conclusion, I understand the point of view of people who worry about cultural globalisation because it is a threat to national traditions [summary of first paragraph]. However, this is outweighed by its positive impact on international understanding and the fact that it represents progress within a society [summary of second paragraph].

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13 Responses to IELTS globalisation essay

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    Thanks for reply
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    • Dominic Cole December 19, 2011 at 2:28 pm #

      I suggest you contact a teacher now to do a “needs analysis” so that you know where you are now – what problems you have and what you need to work on. It’s always good to know where you stand.

      What happens then is up to you. Often the best candidates are those who become their own teachers. That said, you may need more help – it just depends.

      You should also definitely contact a teacher a month or so before the exam to make sure you are on track. I’d also say you are doing the right thing by planning ahead – 6 months is a sensible approach.

      Let me know how it goes.

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  8. Sunggie April 12, 2017 at 4:17 am #

    Sir,
    My teacher prohibited me from using too much structure languages, since he believes they are formulaic. However, I usually fail to show my strain of thoughts in my essays. After studying your website, I decided to try more ways to write my Ielts essays. I just wrote one borrowing the structure you show above. I would really appreciate it if you could take a looke at it and let me know whether the structure works. Thank you very much!

    Multi-cultural societies, in which there is a mixture of different ethnic people,
    bring more benefits than problems to a country. To what extent do you agree
    or disagree?

    It is true that there are more multi-ethnic nations in today’s world due to the global migration. While it is argued that there are problems in multi-cultural societies, I agree with the idea that it can bring far more benefits.

    The first point to make is that there are drawbacks in culturally diverse societies, but they are relatively minor. The most significant of these disadvantages is the risk of social conflicts between two or more ethnic groups as a result of differences in religious beliefs, practices, ethnic rituals and certain ways of life. Immigrants, for example, are sometimes recognised as new comers that cannot adapt to local communities and are responsible for job losses. It is noticeable, however, in countries that adopted muliculturalism as an integrative policy, including Canada, Australia and Sweden, such conflicts only arise during financial crisis or due to lack of social programmes.

    When we turn to the bright sides of the multiculturalism to a country, there are two major points to make. Firstly, cohesive cultural diversity contribute to the growth of the education sector, especially tertiary institutions. There is greater diversity in curriculum and staff, leading to an improvement in student satisfaction with their tertiary education experience. A good illustration is that Australia has become a global education destination attracting many foreign students to pursue a degree every year. Secondly, a multi-ethnic population can give the country a competitive edge and make it more likely to capture global markets. Immigrants employed by manufacturers normally have a good command of foreign languages and can contribute assignments on different perspectives, which can help companies to build better international connections.

    My conclusion is that I understand that multicultural countries may have social conflicts. However, it is out-weighted by its positive impact on the education sector and a country’s global market share.

  9. Dominic Cole April 13, 2017 at 12:38 pm #

    Too much structure language can hurt you if it’s simply formulaic and takes away from the content.One use in this essay to think about is

    The first point to make is that there are drawbacks in culturally diverse societies, but they are relatively minor.

    Is that necessarily the first point to make? Maybe not. In any event this sentence is stronger and perhaps clearer.

    While there are drawbacks in culturally diverse societies, they are relatively minor.

    Or you may prefer this variation which retains more structural language but uses it to effect by pointing up what is important.

    While there are drawbacks in culturally diverse societies, it is important to note that they are relatively minor.

    • Sunggie April 14, 2017 at 5:01 am #

      Thank you so much!
      I am not sure wether I get it right:

      you use “I will explain why” in the introduction ,so it is natural to give the first reason here.

      but, there is just a position in my instruction, so I should try to explain my opinion in the main paragraphs rather than say ” The first point”

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